Cover Letter Draft

Dear Professor Fornes:

In this class there has been some ups and some downs dealing with the class in general and my writing. I guess it is the same for all the other students as well. I would like to think that I am improving. Improving is an important thing for me, because I really need to pass this class with a "C" or better. I will know if I have improved at the end of the semester if the grade is what I need and want it to be.

I came into this class worried, because I knew I had some weaknesses that would affect my grade. Granted, I do have some strengths as well. I do well with grammer and mechanics. I, however, have lots of trouble getting information to put into the essays. My essays always seem to come up short in the lenght department.

Every essay that I have to do, that is not just research, comes up short. Sometimes it is drastically short and sometimes I am only missing a few words. I can never seem to figure out what else to put into the essay to make it longer. I have tried putting in specific details, but it still does not come out to be enough. On my first essay dealing with Facebook, my essay was about four hundred words too short. I am pretty sure that my second essay is roughly that short as well.

Knowing that my essays are so short, I need to do something about it if I want to improve. I, somehow, need to find a way to add more words. I can try and add a great deal more detail into the essay. I can also put in my own personal opinion. I may also broaden some ideas or add in a few more to lenghten it.

I know that writing is very important now and later in life. Now, because I need it to get the grades that I want. Later, because my career will require it. As a crime scene investigator, I will need to know how to write down evidence and know hoe to write crime reports. If I do not know how to write correctly I will not suceed in life as a whole.

I plan to try my best in the future on my essays. That is really all I can do. I will try to put more effort into it. Also, hopefully, I will lengthen my essays. By lengthening them, they might even become better as a whole. I really hope to make them better and longer.

Sincerely,

Heather Spivey

Blog Post #4

Paper #1
“Foreign Athletic Limits”
Grade: B-
Explanation: This paper may have had an ok thesis statement, but there were other sentences that were not complete or wrong. Also there are grammer errors. The author does use sources, however.

Paper #2
“Online College vs. Online High School”
Grade: B-
Explanation: This paper also has an ok thesis. The grammer has some errors as well. The is some commas needed. This paper also has sources used. There is some quotations needed.

Paper #3
“Predisposed to Divorce”
Grade: A-
Explanation: This paper is done really well. There is a good thesis sentence. Also the writer has good sentence structure. The writer uses sources really well. Also the argument was to the point.

Paper #4
“NAACP Case Against Gun Manufacturers”
Grade: C+
Explanation: This essay had no clear thesis sentence. It has some good sentences, but a few could be made better. It has some good use of sources.

Blog Post #3

In her article,"Video Game Violence and Our Sons", Rebecca Hagelin uses the example of a teenage murder named Devin Moore. She states that he was big on playing the video game "Grand Theft Auto" and that this game most likely warped his mind. Hagelin can not base this murder solely on video games even if they are violent. There are millions of people in this world who play video games and yet they are not going around killing people. A video game is just something for entertainment.

Blog post #2

I decided to choose the article, "Video Game Violence and Our Sons" by Rebecca Hagelin, because I am against what she says. I think what she is writing is full of crap. I think that video games have nothing to do with people killing others. As the saying goes "Guns don't kill people, people kill people", same applies for video games. There are millions of people in this world who have played these kinds of video games and have never thought of going out and actually killing someone. I am, in fact, one of those people, who play video games. I have never in my life thought of chopping someone's head off or setting them on fire. I also think that if so many parents are worried about these video games, why are they buying them for their kids then?